You.....Complete Me

You make my like alive again in this hell because you are like “PEARL” to me in this “CHROMATIC” world……….. 

 

 

  

You meet at…………..”HELLO”

It was a day of dreamful shallow

For you it was just a daily ‘Vogue’

I was like palmate……. in front of you!!

 

 

 

Life was taking variations

Things were working like versatile

Hopes were taking promotions

Destiny was prolonging for me……..

 

 

 

Life’s amplitude was increasing with your induced love….

It was the feeling of attached ‘Shunt’ to me

Conservation of love became conscienced

It was like a drop of ‘Nectar’ for me……

 

 

 

It was like a rainy drop for drought

It was like a first salary for fresher

It was like having house on “PENTOMINIUM”

It was like having trajectory for me to “HEAVEN”

 

Author's Note

In this poem some words are of science fiction that are very simple and you will understand smothly and some are of like of current General knowledge like pentominium-- it is 2nd tallest tower in world for living for humans its of 120 storey situated in DUBAI........

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This was nice...
Much better than your previous writing.
I liked the format of this writing a lot and the usage of few words like - "pentominium"
But it lacked for me with the flow and even at few places when the flow was there, it felt very forceful.
As if...you are trying very hard to write this...Let the words come from your heart and not from your mind Anirudh :)
Also, before reviewing your upcoming work I would like to know your age also and then will judge it accordingly :)
In between this writing demands a grammatical check :)

[Clarisse Nanoit]

I simply don't get this poem. I suppose it was your bizarre word choice? I don't really know. I understand the overall sentiment, but I don't specifically understand what the poem says. I wish I could be more constructive with my criticism, but I'm not exactly sure what advice to offer. Sorry! And sorry it took me so long to get around to this read request. Thank you for sharing.
KH

[Adrian K. Smith]

There is a little loss of meaning in some of the word choices, but that will depend upon the audience and their point of reference. The language as well lends itself to a particular audience, which may or may cause issue with those other than said audience. Yet, it was written for them - so it would be them that would offer the best understanding of the flow that evolves through the piece...allowing them to complete the meaning where others may stumble.

[Sumit Kumar Gupta]

Hey dude heading of your poem has a horrible mistake as it should be complete me.....instead of completes and there are some blunder grammatical error which you need to amend.The content is good but not so worthy to enjoy! lol ! try hard!! ^-^