Over a Coffee

A perfect meeting

Come on in.
Tea? Coffee?
Ah, coffee, good choice.
I'll just top up the cafetiere.

Your pictures,
Serve you but little justice,
You're attraction,
Is in the eyes,
Not the red reflection.

Your mannerisms,
Most enticing,
And the level of ease,
The flow of conversation,
Magnificent.

Over a coffee,
I learned you,
Realized your significance,
The role you play,
In my small life.
The options you open,
The knowledge you offer.

Over a simple coffee,
We laughed,
Smiled together.
Enjoyed the bliss,
Of casual conversation.

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

Hi Lindsey, This is a bit enigmatic! Is there something deeper going on - what options are on offer? The doubt is good though and maybe you could have played on it more - then your final line 'casual conversation' suggests that it's just an everyday chat. Well done!
Can I I just make a couple of suggestions - I presume that the 'you're' in the second verse should be 'your'. In the fourth verse 'I learned you' doesnt sound quite right to me - 'got to know you' maybe but I'm maybe too old fashioned!
Thanks, Alan
If you have some time you might enjoy my story 'The Letter' - also about a very everyday subject.

[Armistead Lindsey]

Hey,
There is a lot going on in this poem, as there was in the time it refers to. The situation it is based on had multiple layers of circumstance and possibility. The concise nature of the poem is intended to convey how the exploration of emotion and thought within the situation was cut short by it's own time frame.

You are correct about the you're in the second line, that is one of the issues i have quite often. All of my work is written by hand in a selection of notebooks and then typed up. Often i find myself looking at the start of the wrong line, or just racing to get it typed up that i often over look such mistakes. Thank you for pointing it out.

I completely understand what you mean about 'I learned you' not seemingly right. The context of the meet with the person concerned is the only thing which makes it correct. This meaning I will not reveal - it would be like explaining my diary to a person.

Once i have corrected the spelling error within the poem I shall give your work a review.

Many thanks for your input, review and encouragement :)

With writers regards,
Armistead ;)

[alanwgraham]

Thanks, I am even more intrigued after your reply. Since I joined this site recently I am learning that what I write doesn't always communicate directly with the audience -on one level many of my works are in Scots which many can't understand. Also the issue that you mention referring to personal matters in the work. It can be quite therapeutic having a place like this, where most are wrting under a pseudonym, to bring these things out! I write under my own name, perhaps foolishly (I can be googled!) and noone is too keen to hang out their dirty washing in public! Speaking metaphorically of course!
Cheers, Alan

[Armistead Lindsey]

Intrigue is what fuels the mind.

Your writing is only for the engagement of the audience in so much as they can take what they may please from it. the true meaning, reason and motivation behind is under no obligation to be shown. Writing, especially through poetry and fiction is the most discreet form of diary that can be publicly shown. You can read it back to yourself and understand each metaphor and illusion in the same way as when you wrote it, but a humble onlooker will gain nothing but their own perception when reading the same piece. A writer is only but a guide for a readers own mind - at least in my opinion.

It is extremely therapeutic to be able to share works on sites such as this. It allows people such as ourselves to express the things which circle in the mind so frequently, yet do so in an almost fully fictional form and often without explanation.

I write under a pseudonym, and always have done, purely because some aspects of my work are so extremely personal that to do so under my real name would compromise the freedom of my writing. Very few people in my life are aware of the pseudonym, and those who are have exceptional insight into my thoughts and life that it makes no difference.

By no means am I a private person, should someone ask me directly about a specific thing in my life I will typically answer in a very direct manner. But through my writing i can explore emotions, perspectives and circumstances in an open yet entirely private way, without obligation to explain.

Is the intrigue burns a hole in the side of your head feel free to message me directly for an explanation, but one will not be aired here in an attempt to maintain a certain level of discretion.

[hi]

another poem i like, i like how it started it was like talking, it seemed to me like it was two friends in need of help, i could be wrong but is how i took it