Fiction Poem

:) another strange and interesting piece in my opinion give me yours please :)

Fiction poem on the way

aliens are here to stay 

Three handed people everywhere

humans are about to disappear

No more pain in the atmosphere

Only light and joy appear

Heaven rain pours on our shoulders

vivid world in front of us appear

It is just like you always told us 

it is like we have always been here

No pain and suffer 

only happiness and joy

You are now tougher

you are not a lonely boy

Fiction you just want your life to be

fiction is the only thing that sets you free

Reviews

[Michael X]

wow, I really like this, its touching in its realistic meaning of growong up
and seeing times wash away, remebering what it was like to be carefree
in the midst of nature, now reality has set in and nature walks on concrete
not the plush grass of youth, awsome use of words, and the space alien
tidbit gives this an extended feature of perspective. awsome poem

[Kerry O'Connor]

A surrealistic vision of the future.

[JENY]

sounds like a strange philosophy…
its good…
a new angle of vision…
very creative...

[Vitcky Walker]

nice, very good joyou are right abut your last line..very nice

[Mauricio Montoya]

vivid imagination makes this awesome!

[emmajoy]

There's a great deal of truth in what you've written, 'fiction is the only thing that sets you free'

Haven't met one of your aliens yet .. there's time though!

Our thoughts are rather like dreams, we adventure and sometimes fly into places we didn't know existed; we can create what and who we want and wherever we our fancy takes us. Maybe adults should remember that they're they're only children grown up!

[Helena]

Good write. Much enjoyed by me.

[Vicky Zhuang Yi-Yin]

I completely agree with the ending, fiction is what will set us free... I liked the concept and the rhyming structure. Good job and Good Writings!
-Yin

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. ah, this is so beautiful ... you create so much magic here ... so profound ... amazing poetry ... perhaps it is in fiction that we allow ourselves to dream with open eyes ... :) ...

[Allison]

I realllllly like this. Its so quirky and abnormal. Its so original.

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Good. The different things you said in the poem came together to give a rather...strange effect like you said. Good use of words.