Our Laughter

My first attempt at a Zejel. Thanks to MsJewel for sharing her expertise.

All the laughter you bring to my heart

All the joys in my life you impart

Your gift is a rare form of art

 

The rest of the world disappears

And angels of joy hover near

Our troubles seem nothing to fear

For a moment in time they depart

 

For the sound of your laugh in reply

Makes me laugh in response ‘til I’m high

And then we both have to stop with a sigh

As we recall we are now worlds apart

 

And then you evoke a time from before

And we laugh at the thought even more

I know why it is you I adore

Our hearts will in truth never part

Reviews

[ferousfinite]

A nice little piece. ...a very interesting opening. Why did you choose this format?

[Giggling Star]

Because I really don't know anything at all about poetry and MsJewel was kind enough to publish the requirements. Just thought I'd give it a try.

[ferousfinite]

Knowing is not the same as learning. You write, correct? Write from the heart.

[Giggling Star]

Well I do ... as you might expect ... but I think learning leads to knowing. And I'm interested in learning from the people on this site that are better educated. Most of the time I just write from the heart. Sometimes its fun to challenge myself to try something different.

[ferousfinite]

Learning as to knowing is standing as to swimming.

[Giggling Star]

Perhaps you and I have different definitions for learning & knowing. I think just the opposite. Knowing is to standing as learning is to swimming.

[ferousfinite]

Linear vs Tao =)

[Giggling Star]

Fun talking with you! :) ............ Giggles

[J. J. Nightingale]

I LOVE this one .. and I can relate !

Soft and smooth.. and lovely..

Perfection in verse ...

Jasmine :)...................

[Giggling Star]

Thank you so much Jasmine ... I certainly appreciate you taking a look. What a nice review!

[J. J. Nightingale]

It truly is wonderful .... very nice ....and YOU r welcome .......:)............

[MsJewel]

I love this! The last line is the perfect ending to this beautiful love song. You rocked this form my friend. Aren't forms fun? I say that - and then I struggle over them. This really is lovely!

:) Julie

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Thank you for taking a look Julie, I really appreciate it. And you're right - they are fun :)

[Madalyn Beck]

This is beautifully written! Great work!

[Giggling Star]

Thank you so much for stopping to read! :)

[Lyn Anderson]

A lovely, soft, and longing verse. One tiny question, did you mean to say A sigh, and not just sigh?

[Giggling Star]

I love it when you review my "stuff"! I can always count on you to spot something I've overlooked. Thank you so much for the review :D

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks man. I have that weird little quirk. I try to scrub it off, but it sticks. :)

[Giggling Star]

Don't scrub it off - its very helpful!!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! Recently, I'm back to making different forms of poetry which I used to do before, Star.
This is superb. I want to try also this Zejel form. Wish I could make one this day.

Going back to your poem, I like the concept too much. Laughter makes the heart younger. LOL. Always be with someone who makes you smile and laugh. =)

You're great!

[Giggling Star]

Thanks so much Dhaye! MsJewel has the info on the Zejel in her Author's Notes on the poem Invisible Threads. It's always good to see you!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes, and I just made one, Of course I put your and Ms. Jewel's link as acknowledgement. I researched about Zejel and then posted it under my note. Burt it's just a simple one. Hehe.

[Frieda P]

A feel good read, made my heart smile, so important to laugh together....especially till you're high. ;-) Good one stargazer....

[Giggling Star]

Thanks for popping over Frieda. BTW I have a request for you. I would love to hear your laugh ... could you record it and put it out on your page as a sound bite?

[Frieda P]

Hahaha, my kids say I'm too loud, you want I should scare the cafe off?............and my pleasure. ;-)

[Giggling Star]

I'll show you mine ... if you'll show me yours :)

[Frieda P]

Hahahahaha, you crack me up. ;-)

[Scott Metro]

Laughing is so important...it cleans the spirit.
This is a wonderful write Miss Star.....excellent...
Keep laughing.
Admiration.
Scotty

[Giggling Star]

Thank you so much Mr. Wolf! What a nice review. :D

[Scott Metro]

My pleasure....
S....