1:07 PM

Maybe it's the way I stayed on the line 

Even though the conversation ended long ago 

My grandfather's dying 

And all I wanted to do was run home back to you 

Where you will never be 

Reviews

[M]

Such a powerful impact, it made me want to hug you. Love this poignant expression of grief.

[Chris]

The touch of reality paused me here.

[Matthew Kult]

Poetically mournful.

Good read.

With love,

Matthew

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This is so hard...I remember the last time I spoke to my dad.
I prayed he could hear me even though he could not respond...and was no longer conscious.
I think your grandfather somehow knew your aspirations to be with him.
j.

[John Fitzgerald]

This is so sad, yet earnest and heartfelt. Feel the stretches of time lost in every word, it’s painful but beautifully expressed

[Aura]

This speaks of a tragedy beyond the literal one. The heart yearns for what it desires but cannot attain. Truly sad. Thanks for sharing

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Death is part of the cycle of life unfortunately but try telling that to someone that loses their family or friends

It’s so dam hard

The staying on the line reminded me of something I did after my sister passed in 1982
Anyway nice write
Sorry for your loss x

[willweb]

I'm with those below, outstanding. This one dives deeply into the heart and grabs the reader and says...look!. Nicely done.

[red93]

Excellent Work - says it all in a few brief phrases. I am wary of describing anything as a Haiku or Tanka on this site, but this definitely has a Tanka feel to it.

[emmajoygreen]

A few tragic words with a mountain of meaning. (You)