What a miraculous undertaking for someone so young...the rhythm and cadence are beautiful. Speaks volumes although I have never though of the Mind's Eye in such a way this is quite a vivid picture you paint with your words. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha
Great piece I see and speak often from my mind's eye, a scorpio, poet, empath, wood/horse, 4 life path, 22 masterbuilder, and a nonconformist, I enjoyed this poem,Shelly
good. Not my style because I usually really want my poems to be solid in their meaning so no one else can control it... wow, so I'm basically insabe. Anyway, I like dit but I didn't love it (pardon me for explaining the 'why').
The images could be great - but you don't aim it towards anything. The words could be powerful - but you don't focus that power. There's no subject here, as you said - "make of it what you will" and that's why the poem works so well with so little. But what I like about focused poems is that there is a punch line where the reader can suddenly match up with what the speaker is saying. Unfocused poems don't have that, so the punch is weaker for some readers. Still, it's great art because it is art. Thnaks for sharing and best fo luck :)
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