As It Flows

As it flows so thick and red,

the sharpened blade beside my bed.

I start to think and all I see

are images of you and me.

I wish you were here by my side

just so I didn't have to hide

in the darkness of my room

all I can think of is my doom.

Thinking back on what you said

thoughts are churning in my head,

and all I want to do is know

if you'll still love me when you go.

Reviews

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lovely rhyme, great metered poem..simple but very effective.

[AchingAlexandra]

Wow.
Usually I don't like rhyming, but that was beautiful.

[Preston Lynch]

deep.

[*Evelen*]

This poem is short but very deep and dark. Really enjoyed reading. Keep it up and well done.

[Kaitlyn]

I love this poem. It is really truly amazing!

[Needy]

I like this. Deep :)

[trainwreck]

This is intense and moving. It throws one off their kilter and makes them face their own emotions. The way you opened it is not the way you ended it thematically, and that makes the whole thing better. I enjoyed reading it. I like how your poems are extremely organized and well-thought out in their flow. Free form poetry is nice too, but this was pretty good. Thanks for sharing.

[Leanne Conway]

Oh hon, This is amazing... I'm here for you, Just saying.

-Lilith♥

[Marie Harrison]

Oh this is dark....at first I thought it was about cutting. Scary poem!