I Love You, I Hate You

I just wrote what I hate/Love about a guy I like, and tried to put it in stanza's. I think I failed, but I tried

Oh, how I love your style, your hair

Your personality, the way you sit on a chair.

The way you always sit on the bench at the park

 

Oh, how I love the way you hug me;

Tight, and with both arms, not just one.

I love it when you pick me up, even though I way a ton.

 

Oh, how I hate the way you have to touch your hair every five minutes.

The times when you try to rhyme for me.

That you’re obsessed with that Superman tee.

 

Oh, how I hate that you wear all those bracelets.

That you have to take all those pictures of me, when I tell you not to.

How you dyed your hair blue.

 

I hate all those things aout you, but I still love you.

And that’s why I believe that we’re meant to be together,

Forever.

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think. I love to have feedback. Did I do well?

Reviews

[Dewella~Vintella]

Very nice, to the point and focused. I have to admit that I have moments like this as well. Watching someone I love and thinking how much I love them. and then being reminded of the little things that drive me crazy as well.

It flowed nicely, and I didn't see and errors. Good job. :)

Vinny~

[Sami Khalil]

A lovely write...:)................

[Teenage Romeo]

Well you have captured the way u feel about someone but I think that it needs more power to it

[Tasha]

You didn't fail at all. It reminded me of Miley Cyrus's song 7 things. Other than that you did a great job, I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work.
♥ Ta'Shandra