Vengeance....

Vengeance....

A Poem by barricade

Your constant ignorance,

wont break my stance…

I would still walk to you,

i will take my chance…


Close ur eyes,

or run away...

but you'll open your heart,

to me someday…


You're giving me this pain,

and its growing each day...

my love is vengeance,

and i'll have it my way…


Each word you said,

to me was a lie...

I will hurt you now

but wont let you die…


You'll feel my pain,

with each breath you take...

You'll burn in my hell

for each mistake…!!!!

© 2010 barricade


Author's Note

barricade
not based on any experiences...is completely fictional....jus tryna burst outta bad writer's block...

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Good, but i feel that the rhyme (though not forced) is cutting off from its potential. try experimenting with different styles of poems.. One thing that helps when i have writers block is finding words that either mean a lot to me, i just like the way they sound or hold a lot of feeling.. Thesaurus.com is a great start :]

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Fiction or not this poem is all too real to me. It breaths the love/hate relationship so well. Splendid way to chip away at that writer's block!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barricade

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind review. your words mean a lot to me :)
Oooooooh! Always so angry Mr Barricade...I wonder what is the cause for your eloquent fury?

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this..good one.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this. As a matter of fact, I love it so much that I've shown it to someone I know to cheer them up. I love this....just like all your other work, as always. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good, but i feel that the rhyme (though not forced) is cutting off from its potential. try experimenting with different styles of poems.. One thing that helps when i have writers block is finding words that either mean a lot to me, i just like the way they sound or hold a lot of feeling.. Thesaurus.com is a great start :]

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow..!!ITs baeutifull..!! :)
great write..!! ^_^

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love it. I can feel the push and pull. This attraction and repulsion. This love/hate relationship. But, in reality you should probably flee relationships like this for they never end well. Great write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This work was something that I was lost in from start to finish.....in a good way. Nicely done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with PK! Me likes it very much to :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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barricade

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