Getting your focus back

Tried to put together a poem about focus

Smoke gets in your eyes,

It's hard to see, from underneath your brow,

Time and tide takes hold of your focus,

Like letting a tree move in and out of focus,

A circle of life,

A circle of life, caught in the middle,

Your tender heart strings pull,

Your mind is pulling you,

Asking you to come and see,

From underneath your brow, take a chance,

But it's when clouds of smoke, gets in your eyes,

Loosing focus, time evaporates,

Hide behind the smoke haze,

The organized decays,

A circle of life

Smoke gets in your eyes,

It's hard to see, from underneath your brow,

Time and tide takes hold of your focus,

Like letting a tree move in and out of focus,

A circle of life,.

It's now or never, someone is waiting to show you how,

It's all that is left, there is an escape,

Wipe your brow, and beside everything you will see, a way out,

As the smoke haze clears, trust, take a leap,

And enjoy a new circle of life

 

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Reviews

[armin]

You know focus and concentration has been a challenging task for me, I usually suffer a lot due to lack of focus. Whenever I put my books on table I feel like someone whispers in my ears telling I should do something else something filled with fun.
But beside all of that ,I manage to crack good scores.

Your write was nicely penned, last few lines are tremendously written. Thank-you.

armin. ...

[B.J]

Thank you for the kind review

[armin]

:-):-)....

[W R Stowe]

Life is often a smoke that blocks your focus is often why we make the same mistakes over and over again. Imagine your life was a tornado spinIt's now or never, someone is waiting to show you how,

It's all that is left, there is an escape,

Wipe your brow, and beside everything you will see, a way out,

As the smoke haze clears, trust, take a leap,

And enjoy a new circle of lifening out of control, as many abused women feel like. Their abuser tries to convince them they have no value or worth, telling them things like your too fat or who would want you with those kids you have.

this ending is so fitting and presents the hope you can have and start to heal very good and dynamic

livening, likening, or was it lifening ?

[B.J]

Thank you so much for your kind review and support..Most welcome

[W R Stowe]

your more than welcome BJ

[B.J]

:)...................

[Lizardo]

Focusing can be a hard task for some people...
No JK xD If you want to concentrate, then you can concentrate! It all depends on what you want.
I love the ending lines
"As the smote haze clears, trust, take a leap
and enjoy a new circle of life"
Beautiful poem

[B.J]

Thank you my friend enjoyed your comment

[Lizardo]

You're welcome friend :)

[B.J]

:)................................................

[wordman]

when the smoke settles it will all come into focus
and even more vivid and colorful the first time

[B.J]

Thank you my friend, I've had a sleep, going to have a bit more of a look around