i like him but he doesnt like me

I like him but he doesn't like me I want him to know but I'm scared to tell him and we have only been talking for 2/3 hours and I need to tell him but I cant I'm to scared I hope when I tell you that you will love me and want to be with me... I love him with all my heart and I want you to love me more then I love you

Author's Note

sorry if its bad

Reviews

[fleamailman]

"...well if it's for real, then I'm all ears..." went the goblin not cutting it as a real writertype though, just someone willing to listen when someone else was hurting, then adding "...perhaps if you can't live without something then you really not ready for it neither, wait awhile, gain confidence in yourself, for men like those women who are not dependent upon them, but men are such odd creatures now..."

[Phill Oz O'fee]

I can see what you are aiming for here, but perhaps consider revamping the short story into ‘thinking’ mode; i.e. how you are questioning yourself; example

I’m thinking, ‘I like him, but does he like me?’ I want him to know but I'm scared to tell him. I’m thinking, ‘we have been talking for two or three hours’! I need to tell him but I can’t, I'm too scared.

When I do tell you how I feel, I pray you like me too and will be with me.

I’m thinking, ‘I love him with all my heart and want him to reciprocate, perhaps more than myself’!

I hope my interpretation highlights the message in a new perspective and gives you creative ideas! Bless … :-)

[Donna]

This is not bad, just a bit confused. How do you know if he doesn't like you?
If he doesn't like you, then why would you tell him your feelings?

[Fernando Dardón]

Jum... I wouldn't say it is bad. It is interesting indeed, but it confuses me a little. ¿Is that your purpose? Cause if it is, then its working hehe. Btw I believe you got a spelling mistake, just right where it says "but I can't, I'm TOO scared". I suggest you to check the grammar as well.
Interesting short post ;)