Birth Of A New Vampire

For a contest.

I rose into the dark of night

Not remembering the attack that sent me here

My body ached as did my mind

I shuddered as I felt the pain chase away my fear

Blood! Blood! Glorious blood!

The crimson tide called out to my pain

I needed it now I needed to feed

I felt revulsion but it was all in vain

I crawled from my silent cold grave

Out into the damp autumn night

Rain fell all around me but I noticed not

I shivered in the moon's uncaring light

I went forth filled with horror and need

What sort of monster had I become?

The blood called to me I could not ignore

What damage to me had been done?

I could smell the blood on the cold air

I could hear the heart beats of the living

I felt the madness stirring in my mind

I fell to the ground screaming and clawing

I hurt so bad my body burned away inside

My veins were dried up and in desperate need

I would die if I didn't have blood now

To survive I would need to kill and feed

Did I want to spend eternity as a Blood Drinker?

Did I want to continue on as I was, a vampire?

Yes! Yes! I didn't want to die, I chose to survive

I would kill and drink blood to put out this internal fire

I went forth from the cemetery and found my first victim

My first kill as a vampire was messy, bloody but so tasty

I sighed with relief resigned to my fate as an undead creature

Knowing life for me would be hell and would be ecstasy

Eternity is a long time and I grew strong on my diet of blood

I became a predator of the dark and the light did not hold me at bay

No boundaries were there for me as a creature of the damned

Vampires I discovered, are just as lethal and hungry by day

Author's Note

I want to give thanks to my writing friends who helped me write this. THANKS!

Reviews

[Coyote Song]

A very compelling tale of a vampire's birth into its new nature. Very well written, the reader can't help but be pulled into the experience as the new vampire must start to come to terms with its new life and being. Nice rhyming, it helps the poem carry the story alone to its conclusion.

[Sami Khalil]

"I crawled from my silent cold grave

Out into the damp autumn night

Rain fell all around me but I noticed not

I shivered in the moon's uncaring light




I went forth filled with horror and need"


Hauntingly scary , wonderfully written...Bravo

[Black Cat Fever]

Thanks very much!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).............

[Enid Blake]

I like that you have really tried to convey how the vampire would feel. It's an interesting tale.

[Black Cat Fever]

Thanks much!

[Caradoc]

Wonderful poem.

The imagery was well done and the story of that first night as a vampire was...tasty. I liked the attention to the inner turmoil the character felt of not wanting to be a monster, but wanting to live, to survive. That survival triumphed over goodness is just another layer of the tragedy that is the vampire, and even so, an echo of real life humanity.

Very well done.

My favorite part though was the last line.

Thank you very much for entering my contest.

-Caradoc

[Black Cat Fever]

Thanks!

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Great poem. A chilling tale of a vampire upon waking up. A very creative write!

[Star Wolf]

Awesome poem! I really love this vamp tale. Very creative and spooky!

[Eric Cox]

Cool, chilling. Excellent creative pen upon this.

[Tina Kline]

A really good vampire poem! I enjoyed the tale in this, very well written and deeply compelling. Very enjoyable dark poem!!!