practice poem's

The poems I first wrote. I am just starting to learn to write poetry and short stories.

Poverty

We don’t notice
That much is clear
For if we saw
Than we would care
But not enough
Of us care
When we see
Because if
 we were to stop
And think
About it
Than we would
See That
It could
Be me
Who is just
A paycheck
Away from
Being one
Of
Them.


The old river

I was here
When the  dinosaurs were only here
When the Indians were the only man
Living here
I saw the white man ship’s come
I saw the war’s with the Indians
The slave ship’s
The war between North and South
The civil right’s movement
I witness the alien that land in Roswell
And when the world come’s to an  end
I will
Witness it
Too!


My dog

My best friend
Never judges
Doesn’t speak
Always’ happy
To be
With me
When I leave 
He’s sad
When I come home
He jump with joy
My protector
My buddy
My child who I’ve raised
He been by my side
From day one
And will be
Faithfully
By my side
Where every
I shall go
No matter
What.

Author's Note

I am a new writer practicing how to write and am looking forward to hearing everyone's feeling on my work. I have learned a lot on this site so far.

Reviews

[Claire Twinn]

Welcome to writers cafe! You have some nice ideas and ways of expressing yourself, so keep writing! I agree with Linda, you do need to get your grammar right. All your apostrophes are wrong (apart from doesn't) should not be there- look up the rules for using them/not using them.

[bluesman]

I do need work on my grammar and I am happy you like my ideas. Thank you.

[Linda]

I like the poem but there are many grammatical errors.
Like, IDK if that's how you meant to write your poem but it should "rights" not "right's"
and in the last stanza, where it says, "From day one, And will be, Faithfully, By my side, Where every -----" What comes after "every"?
Other than that, I like the poem a lot but those errors can be fixed and it will be awesome!
BTW, how old are you?
And I know you'll learn lots in this site! There are so many people you can turn to to ask for help
*I can help too, BTW I love to help others :D