Something for you.

I let someone go who I just realized... im absolutly in love with.

Pieces of paper on my floor,

Scratches across the words.

A million lines running through my head,

and I can't understand a word.

I'm running on empty and can't focus a bit

because your voice keeps running in my head!

So many times I've tried to Shut it up,

but it's not letting me forget.

I keep telling myself

"nothing lasts forever"

and

"Forget the ones who forgot about you"

But to bad I never told myself

"Maybe you're just scared because for once, someone actually wants to be with you."

 

Now it's to late to take my own advice

and you have left for good,

and it now leads us to where I started off...

 

Sitting on my bed trying to describing how much I love you.

Author's Note

The last line, I changed over and over again so if it's not the best ending please give me some ideas. Please and thank you!

Reviews

[Michael Guccione]

That's a terrible feeling when you know you've blown it with someone and somehow through ruining your chance at love, you discover how much you underestimated the power of that love. Well crafted expression.

[LeeAnne]

Great poem. I love the set-up and the message. This is also very well written... I love the line,

"I'm running on empty and can't focus a bit
because your voice keeps running in my head!
So many times I've tried to Shut it up, "

Very emotional. Great work!

[Wildecat]

Good ending and a great poem, thanks for sharing.

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Touching really, this is really well written i like this, i like your ending sounds great.

[Jules]

No, I definitely like the the last line. Actually, your poem reminded me so much of someone that I started crying when I read it. This is so good, don't ever change anything, it's just a shame to know that being miserable causes people to write so well.

[John Stussy]

It's a great ending. I'm really sorry for your heartache. Love is so very confusing, and I'm not sure why we feel scared sometimes when we realize someone wants to be with us. But, take it as a lesson learned for the next instance. Thank you for sharing this with all of us, and keep your chin up Kaitlyn.

[lauren emily]

No, no, no! I really love the last line! I think it ended perfectly! Good work!

~Lauren

[FoolsGold23]

this was touching, and had a great opening that really drew me in. Great job here!