What did I do to deserve this?

I’m so alone

Not very well known

I'm so scared

I'm not prepared

My world is crashing

And I sit here asking

What did I do to deserve this?

I wish I didn't exist

To end it all would be bliss

As the tears fall

I lean against the wall

What did I do to deserve this?

I take away the pain

By putting a bullet in my brain

As my eyes close

The image is froze

The cold dark room

In which my life has conclude 

Reviews

[Odysseus Wanders]

Love this... wonderful rhyme scheme. Each line impacting deep. I know Ill never know exactly what the feeling is in you, while in this place you honor so well, but i know it in me... and your writing describes it well... cold dark rook. Nice powerful personal read Kiss the Rain.

[Sami Khalil]

Emotive , personal and deserving...:).............................

[Kiss the Rain]

Well, thank you very much

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[Chris]

H'lo. Did this piece achieve what you wanted it to? What would have made it stronger? I ask these because I did see your response to the other reader about this being for an awareness event.

[Ryan]

Dang, very powerful and emotional. You are very expressive and you had beautiful flow in this piece. Your rhyme scheme is awesome. I don't usually use a particular rhyme scheme such as ABAB or something. I just add rhyme where I see fit which is exactly what you did. Great job!

The thing I love about poetry is that you can say just about anything and its still ok, and I think you did a great job of showing something that most people are hesitant to talk about. Awesome! Love it. I just hope this isn't how you're feeling.

[Kiss the Rain]

Na, this isn't how i'm feeling. It was a piece i wrote for Suicide awareness. Thank you for commenting

[Ryan]

Oh gotcha! You're welcome!