To Walk Amongst Gods, You....

for a contest...but still, my views of Hope. It's human. The title continues in the poem, just look out for it okay, although it's sooo obvious.

Men must be ready,
Under the whims of sure death,
Sits their desires,
To stand amongst gods,
Where there is hope,
there is struggle,
where there is struggle,
fires ignite,
where there is fire,
there is passion,
where there is passion,
there is fight.
Where there exists fight,
there exists motive,
and through motive,
there is will,
Having Will is crucial,
All will tell,
Victors of History,
Emit them in every fight,
at every plight,
Will allows purpose,
where rests purpose, 
none is still,
where lies movement, 
lies belief,
and belief births Cain and Abel.
It is here that one must choose,
His destiny or his fall,

Either Caine, the motive to kill,
Or Abel, the one of faith destined to fall,
Having Faith,
Omits fear,
Perceives Courage,
Ends after it's too late,
Choosing Cain before Abel,
Is like choosing a Mint before a Cake.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think. pretty hard to put it all in there and not screw up the layout.

Reviews

[Some Random Person.]

Must have hope is right. We all need to keep Hope around, no matter what. It should become a living expectation. It needs to stay, even when we don't feel like anything is going to work.

[Dareen]

Very...moving. I loved this, really!

[nothing]

Very well written. Very well layed out and put together. You can tell it had a lot of thought put into it; But, if no thought was put into it, it makes it even more amazing. You did wonderfully.

Sarah.

This is a high impact piece of writing. Excellent techniques, use of metaphors and a strong, thought provoking theme.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Do you write acoustic poetry? This is very, very good. I like the message, very flowing but also has potent meaning, man poetry. Agreeing with first reviewer, the color emphasis and adds punch. Excellent writing!

[Christopher Stone]

This for me is a very well written and intelligent piece, I will need to re read it several times, not for clarity, but to glean more, like a dog with a bone, I found myself rushing to the next line. The Cain and Abel line is great, food for thought.
I am sure, as you say very hard to maintain the flow, but you managed it very well. C.

[Graceful]

IT IS SOO GOOD! the layout is perfect! ilove how you have the blue letters spell out stuff! bravo my friend!