Mirror, mirror

What do you see?

I see a desitned failure

What could have been.

What would have been.

 

I see eye's that don't see whats in front of them

What acomplishment's never made.

What knowledge never used.

 

I see a frown that never made its way to the top

What a smile they could have seen.

What a bright day they could have known.

 

I see a heart barely beating

Mirror, mirror.

I didn't want this.

Author's Note

man i was really looking for a better ending, just baby keeps crying, so can't think!

Reviews

[qaralynn]

good write! I absolutely love:
''I see a heart barely beating
Mirror, mirror.
I didn't want this.''
nice!!

[S Sanders]

still pretty good for a first draft. you can always come back to it later. and, actually, there's nothing wrong with the ending; at least it is honest.

[OT]

I like the ending, almost like a last glance before going off to do something - it seems like he's readying himself for something - mirror mirror, I See failure, delusions etc. and then the "I didn't want this" adds a sinister tone to it! nice!