la vie en rose .... not so much

this poem has a very saddening and a gloomy aspect

gazing at the hollow ceiling

fighting the treacherous feeling

loosing every last hope of healing

scorning the wrongful fate

growing with malice hate

waiting for the expected date

ending his misery

leaving his agony

cutting his artery

Reviews

[gabrielle]

Two emotions that i felt when i read this: loathing and the desire to take vengeance. For a piece tht tackled a dark issue, it is wonderfully written.

[Latifa]

thank you gabrielle

[wordman]

you did a great job on writing,hope I don`t ever make you mad girl

[Latifa]

thank you i appreciate taking time and reading my work

[Baby Ricochet]

Man that's one sad, bitter poem. Great job.

[Latifa]

thanks rico glad you like it

[redzone]

it is a sad and bitter thing when all hope is gone. suicide is difficult to commit, to understand, to those who are left... what kind of society do we live in where this is seen as the only way out??? yes, it was a hard to read poem, but I am glad you wrote it Latifa. ~~redzone

[Latifa]

thank you redzone for taking the time and reading it

[Dr. Wood ?]

yeah, well described...Something we all hope NOT to face....The knowledge that our end is imminent

[Latifa]

thanks dr. wood

[Strider Marcus Jones]

Excellent control of theme, structure and rhyme. 100/100

[Latifa]

thanks for being so kind

[MikeV]

Great write, i could feel the emotions throughout :)

[Latifa]

thank you mike for taking the time and reading it

[MikeV]

Great write, i could feel the emotions :)

[Jwakefield]

Wow, this has so much feeling in it. I love the last stanza, and the triplets really work great here :)

[Latifa]

thank you for taking the time and reading it

[MsJewel]

This poem is sad and gloomy, but there is release in the last stanza, perhaps ending the darkness and rising above it. (Perhaps my rose colored glasses...)
A great poem. Very well written my friend.

:) Julie

[Latifa]

thank you dear