as true as i love you

the outpour of feelings of a friend after seeing her bestfriend enjoying a company which will not give her sweet memories.

I have been there for you

I have always been there for you

But fate threw me into hell

I was gonna suffer it knew

 

Girl my arms were tight around you

Never letting you to breakdown

My heart was always open for you

As you were my queen without a crown

 

But one day you fell into a hole

Even though knowing it was a trap

You blindly thought it would make you whole

Yes it did, by holding a sinister wrap.

 

You knew not two things

First, the end which awaited you

Secondly in the corner of your world

A girl’s worries grew.

 

I didn’t know when my grip went loosen

Despite of all my warnings and cryings

The hole got chosen.

 

Did my love go that worthless?

That it got consumed by a hole

I always doubted I was careless

Even though I had me around you whorl.

 

Tears flooded down my eyes everyday

When you said you lived with it

My soul went numb for days together

Knowing I failed and was filled with guilt.

 

I have never seen a soul suffer this much

For unfortunately it was my own

And I stood helplessly bare handed

For I had become a king without a throne.

 

The helplessness choked me to death

I kept praying, since

I failed to fulfill my duty

And my prayers went answered for once.

 

But before anything could happen

Life hit you down so hard

Making you to realize that

You had played the wrong chord.

But my arms were absent to catch you

Adding to my guilt beyond

By feeling the unbearable

A lesson of life you earned.

 

I was glad that you learned

But the lot you went through

Suffocated me down

About which you don’t have the slightest clue.

 

Girl, no one is as deserving to get you

And that one thing I always knew

Even though I failed to help this dew

I’m as true as I love you.

 

Author's Note

please ignore any immature writing or grammatical errors....as i have got a poetic license!! please do comment if you happen to like it.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I see your intent is there...but this needs a little more work with your rhyme scheme...seems you put words in there that rhyme --- yes --- but do not make sense...I have to use my own imagination and create the words myself...as a reader...throws off the read...but if you like it --- then by all means that's what counts...nothing else matters...and use poetic license all day long...

[broken_souvenir]

thanks a lot!!! now that is what i call a review !!

[raj24]

i have read it before...ur feelings for ur friend, your care for that person is very much visible.. written with lots of feelings and with the aim of protecting your friend..nicely written :)

Raj

[broken_souvenir]

thanks a lot raj!

[Stewart]

I received your read request and came over right away. Immediately, I got confused as to the rhyming that you threw in. My girlfriend told me about what it was all about and it got better. I understood what you were doing, but the words still didn't make sense to me. However, getting the message, I like it. :)

[broken_souvenir]

thanks a lot... and yaah sure i'll take care of my rhyme scheme !!!

[Briana O'Connor]

I have no idea what a poetic license is but I hold a "I believe poetry is lawless" card.... Anyways.... The emotions in this piece went straight to my soul. I could feel every ounce of pain, guilt and desperation you expressed. The rhyme scheme was slightly off that through off the flow of the poem, but like I said poetry is lawless, in my opinion. Just food for thought. Thank you for sharing and please return the favor by reviewing one of my pieces.

[Coyote Poetry]

A emotional ride in the poem.
"But my arms were absent to catch you
Adding to my guilt beyond
By feeling the unbearable
A lesson of life you earned"
The writing isn't immature. Had feel of real thoughts and memory. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[broken_souvenir]

thanks a lot coyote 1!!!

[shruthi]

brilliant work...!!!!! i am literally in tears...
it's really deep and whatever you felt is shown beautifully

[broken_souvenir]

thanks a lot shruti that means a lot to me!!

[shruthi]

Any tym broken souvnier