Death

Dark voices in the allies, 
The chill of the air,
The coldness in the summer breeze, 
I feel it breathing there.

It's lonely feel surrounds me, 
It's empty heart caves in, 
It's withering soul corrupts me, 
And I feel alive again. 

For this is a warning,
To those who don't know,
Don't go with death, 
For it is a long way to go.

Reviews

[Dalton Holt]

Really nice piece. It has strong imagery, especially in the first stanza. I like this entire poem, but I really like what you say in the last stanza, "For this is a warning, to those who don't know, don't go with death, for its a long way to go." The rhyme in that one is really well placed, really emphasizes your message. The context of this poem reminds me of a few of my own poems.