All I Could

All I could hear was your breathing,
slow and steady.
All I could see was your beauty,
eyes and hair.
All I could feel was your skin against mine,
smooth and cool.
All I could smell was your perfume,
sweet and relaxing.
All I could taste was your lips,
soft and wet.
All I could think about....was you.

Reviews

[KUFU]

Damn Bryce...you put your heart into this smooth piece of work. I read this from the point of view of a females ear...was almost hypnotized into falling for your august poetics...ahem.
This poem needs to be heard aloud.

Very well done sir. Favorite.

[Adela Muresan]

That's so sweet.
You know...sometimes I think that simple poems are the best; with all the fancy rhymes and speech flowers, all the emotion put in it kindda ,,drifts away,, instead of being transmited.

Great write.

A.M.

[Rich Lampani]

Nice and descriptive. Feels like spoken word to me. Good love note brother.

[Bob Carney, "Soon ..]

really nice way about this particular poem. Like I stated on my site, poetry isn't my thing, but I've learned to appreciate it. You have a good flow and rhythym to it, you get your emotions across and you have a handle on the little things that make one love another. Very good write.

[Brentley]

It has perfect flow to it. I enjoyed it!

[Laura E. Aranda]

This one is sooooo my type! I love this one! It reminds me of what my teachers in school would teach, they taught about descriptions and visions....you did that perfectly..