As We Lie

9th

 

As we lie under the lush green tree

The stars shine bright for you and me

The racing river beside us dies

With you is where my whole world lies

 

The lush green tree's leaves will die

Blown by the wind to touch the sky

And you and I will die too

But even then I will always love you

Reviews

[Jules]

I like your use of adjectives =] It's a really cute poem.

Punctuation:
"As we lie under the lush green tree,
The stars shine bright for you and me.
The racing river beside us dies,
With you is where my whole world lies.

The lush green trees leaves will die;
Blown by the wind to touch the sky.
You and I will die too;
Even then I will always love you"

[Lillian]

awww. the early works of bryace simmonds. still meaningful and moving. i like how in a bunch of your poems, you use nature, well done. =)