in darkness I lay awake

short poem

Perhaps I love it here, 

surrounded by my nonexistent memories.

I love the feeling they cause to me.

Those sparkles, much like catching fireflies,

I could choose to chase them, 

if only for a while. 

I am compelled to feel this way,

simply because I am terrified of hating them,

for what they truly portray.

When in this darkness I lay awake.

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

I think I see what the poet is trying to convey, a person in denial of the past for the pain that lies there. However, the term "nonexistent memories" seems to be a contradiction. If something is a memory, it has to have been something that existed, if only in the mind, at some time.

[emipoemi]

There's some mystic je-ne-sais-quoi to this piece that really pulls the reader into its solemnity. Line 3 should drop the "do" and the "to" and it would read better (and make more sense). But everything else is something. It's something indeed. Well done.

[A Bohemian Woman]

Maybe you're right and I will drop the ''do'' but I really like the ''to''. :D Thanks. :)

[emipoemi]

The way you're using "cause", the "to" is not actually grammatically correct.

[A Bohemian Woman]

Not everything needs to be grammatically correct. Especially if it feels right. :)

[emipoemi]

I like that thinking - it's a good way to think. I'm just saying it doesn't really work with "cause". you could say "have on" if you want that extra syllable. I don't know, from a reader's perspective it, "cause to" feels off.