A Thirst

A Thirst

A Poem by Not Afraid of Bruises
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I wrote this yesterday - thought it was good, so let me know what you think :)

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grown, a weed under

some giant bush –

 

could you show some

compassion?

dig up my roots and

bury me deeply so these

thorns and blooms

will never be seen, but

 

let it be in some vacant field,

where I can still feel the sun...

 

for I thirst for warmth

even as I grow dark. 

© 2008 Not Afraid of Bruises


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Very good, very well written, nice topic, and a marvelously beautiful point. "for I thirst for warmth even as i grow dark" brilliant

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like the tight clean writing packed with visuals, questions, and statements. Nice!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

All three poems you entered into my contest have to be under consideration to win a prize. I love the metaphor and the imagery, the personification, and how swift your poetry moves... it's refreshing. Thank you for sharing your work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is good. The image really came through. I thought the sturcture was perfect. The whole poem flowed well. Good work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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