A Poem For A Teacher

Our teacher said to write or draw anything on the back of our finals. He said if it as interesting enough he would give us extra credit. Moved my grade from a b to and A

Teacher Teacher you are so wonderful

My heart you really stole

I’m bored this class hurts my brain

One look at you I go completely insane

Why do you do this to us

Your breaking down our trust

This test was so boring

10 minutes and I would be snoring

I wish a car would hit me

Here comes one see

Now, Now I am dead

Its all your fault they said

You gave us the test

Said just do your best

Because of you I wont live on

They shall burry me in the lawn

Just one more time

What was my crime

I didn’t want this

Hoping me, you wont miss

But no you gave me on

It was the end of my life begun

Before you thought I was lazy

But now you know I’m crazy

 

Reviews

[xX-tito24-Xx]

Well, to tell you the truth, this poem doesn't impress me. I see no punctuation and it looks like something just popped into your head and you threw it at your keyboard, hoping for success. I find myself unable to decide whether the teacher is someone you have a crush on; a teacher whose tests are too hard; or both.

The theme of the poem and the message you are trying to put out there are both interesting, but the way you chose to deliver that message definitely needs some work.

I recommend a re-write, maybe adding some lines, splitting into stanzas, and grouping the relevant parts together, as opposed to just writing down the lines in the order they pop into your head. I understand that this probably a first draft (Hell, most of my poems on here are straight-from-head-to-keyboard works, and they aren't too great either) but just work on it a little bit more and it might turn into something that will leave the reader satisfied instead of disappointed.