we'll play this game forevermore

Something i wrote.. while trying to pursuade myself of something

We'll play this game like it matters

we'll rock this world like living

walk strong , head high

dont ever cry

 

we are the human race

we leave are mark

we fight the lies before our eyes

we'll play the game till the end

 

the game we play is earths amusment

the game we play is gods creation

the game we play is fate and chance

belief, ideals our wishes

 

The game we kno has no set end

mabye no beginning

some find hope in gods gentle hands

while others just keep living

 

some break down

some leave us early

but we all play the same game

comarades agasint the bad throw

 

roll the dice

leave it to chance

take the risk and play

cause in the end we'll all be gone

 

but atleast we can say

with our heads in the sky

we played, we won , we lost

where the human race

 

we are not proud of disaters

our pollution

corruption

a world of lies

 

we make wrong choice

we are not prefect

learning through play

take the right way

 

Just play the game

roll the dice

deal the cards

live for what where here for

 

take the bullets

with gritted teeth

stand up again

and roll again

 

we'll play this game like it matters

we'll lose we'll win , we'll drawn

some cheat

but we all are sure

WE PLAY THIS GAME FOREVERMORE!

Author's Note

alright i kno.. pretty terrible.. but i kinda suck at the ligther stuff, but feel free to throw the insults correnctions and if there are any compliments my way

Reviews

[Kristin Brecoe]

you've got spelling errors and some missed punctuation. there was one moment or two where flow was off. BUT. i still liked it. the overall rhythm was great. and the message was strong. you caught me at the title. and you just had me enjoying it all. I think it would make for a pretty cool song.

[R.D.Scott]

I liked it but there is just something not quite there, some of the points in it are very touching but I think it needs more of a structure maybe, but dont listen to me too much as im a novice lol.

[Jibey]

It needs tightening up but it's a kind of throwaway frolic. In a way the careless romp suits the theme of man's careless and irresponsible behaviour