Under Wraps

(whether you are nine or twenty nine, a prize is a prize)

when the music stopped abruptly

do you recall a certain exhilaration

from that rotating parcel landing

into your eager lap

how your heart skipped a beat

you were all fingers and thumbs

while you sat cross legged

your feet positioned east west

when you had only seconds left

to peel off a layer of old broadsheet

thick with sixties blackened print

before the stylus hit the groove

on it moved, how smudges played

on fingertips and palms resembled

the Black sea but you didn't care

your spirits were up in the air

you knew you were in with a chance

you knew you had a possibility

of gaining a prize, so your eyes stayed

focused and bright

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fast forward at Rebecca's bar

he was at the far end, sending more

than smoke signals my way

easy to read messages on display

his eyes strayed into the floral

curves and folds of my best dress

dark lengthy eye lashes tickled 

my cheek from a distance away

i felt an absent kiss on my neck

then he edged his way through

the throng, nearer and nearer

he caught the sigh of my breath

    the rest is under wraps

Reviews

[Lorry]

Hay, where's part three of this OBVIOUS trilogy, where the wrap is unwrapped?
Stop leaving it to our imagination Chris, if I wanted to think I'd read some fake news.
And that's before I even mention the fact you didn't tell us what was in the parcel... Is this a surreal poem? 😀
I once won a bottle of whisky and pack of cigarettes and lighter at pass ghe parcel... I was 8! Pre health and safety. Mum didn't bat an eyelid, but seemed quite happy later that night, sleeping in the clothes hamper 😀

[Chris Shaw]

Ha ha. Have I wound you up like a corkscrew Lorry? Pass the parcel in my day was usually a book. In fact it was always a book. A children's two and sixpence classic. Now your pass the parcel certainly had more exciting possibilities. Come on now, eight years old and you got whiskey. Talk about an early starter, f**s as well. You didn't do arson with that lighter did you?

Part Three.

Ha. Maybe I'm still waiting to unwrap the prize :))

Chris

[Lorry]

Pass the parcel, youth club fates, I always won booze. No I. D. check, nothing! I think it was the parents way of making it more bearable, making every prize illegal to kids.
Who can blame 'em really? I've heard tell I was a bit of a handful in my formative years.
Glad I vrew out of that 😀

[Lorry]

... Grew out of that.

[Chris Shaw]

Yes, you are all growed up now aren:t you? Still enjoying your sweeties and your curly whirlys:))

[Lorry]

Just discovered Galaxy caramel... It's obscenely good. 😀

[Chris Shaw]

Now you are rubbing salt into an open wound. I can't have dairy :(( boo hoo. Maybe I'll get him indoors to try it though.

[Lorry]

Oopsy, me bad. Nom nom nom 🤭

[Jimmy Yetts]

Tease.
I suppose one could interpret this as quite elegant, playfully soft, erotica.
Guess I'll exemplify the gentleman my mama raised me to be and go with the elegance.
Besides, it suits you and your poetry, rather nicely.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jimmy for your lovely review. Elegance will do very nicely.

Chris

[Ana Papaya]

Brilliant! And leaves the imagination to wonder and wander.
Yes, a prize is a prize at any age. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Ana. Seems us women like things left to the imagination while the male of our species is thinking they've been short changed. Laughing for requests for the third part of a non intended triology. Yes have to agree, a prize is a prize and you can get the same feelings of excitement, regardless of age. Hope you are well my friend.

Chris

[Ana Papaya]

So true. :)
I like your approach, leaving it to the imagination.
Men are like little boys at Christmas that want to unwrap the gifts too quickly.

[Chris Shaw]

Yeah and then they get bored easily :))

[Dave Brown]

not fair leaving the best part under wraps
be looking for another fast forward

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dave. Like Lorry you think you have been short changed. This was a long poem. Don:t think I'll be adding to it. Really raining here now after a beautiful morning. Have aovemy day.

Chris