Mind Corridors

in darkest corners

cobwebs remain unshaken

tears trapped like dead flies

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

dang .. the Cafe' is presenting senryu today. just started my visits and already two out of three .. this one is super dark and all i can think of is getting hit in the face unawares by spider webbing ... your personification of ones tears in such a place is super says i ... dead flies ... we create these horrors in our dark corners and paint them with unapproachable horror so as never to be looked at in the light .. but they fester don't they? powerful stuff ma'am! really has me thinking! thanks for sharing
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E, I woke from a dream and this sprang out:)
Many thanks for your thoughtful response. I don't like dead flies or spiders webs draped in corners as reminders that stuff hasn't been done and dusted:)

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

no... its so very unhealthy for us to entertain them ... wrapping and re-wrapping in webs so thick .. all we know is that what is in there is painful ... perhaps even horrifying

[Poetic Beauty]

Tears being trapped like dead flies...

This say so much in a few short words. I have had tears trapped in my heart like flies in a spider web many times in my life. I also like the imagery that these words paint.

[Chris Shaw]

Trapped tears hurt. Many thanks PB for checking in. Have a great day.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

You have a great day as well

[Patricia Wedel]

My eyes grow dim... and I seldom notice the
cobwebs in my mind. But then I remember
the times when hearts were aglow with
amber moments of eternal love and affection.
tenderly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

You remember the days of wine and roses. Better that they are remembered. Every now and again I find cobwebs, no dead flies, they have long gone, but trapped tears. Oh yes, they remain. Thank you my friend for your poetic loveliness of thought.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

Hi Chris... I have experienced tears; however,
I prefer a Dream Catcher. Be well and safe.
gently, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear friend :)

[Patricia Wedel]

Hi Chris... I recently posed a Haiku... I need your heart print

[Ruth]

Speechless - concise poetry holds such powerful impact - I love this Chris - the detail is so vibrantly vivid - what stories those tears could tell...amazing imagery! :)

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Ruth, thank you so much. I have always been a fan of senryu and Haiku, simply because so much can be said, seen and felt in so few syllables.

Chris

[Laz K.]

My corridors are like that. I know I should clean them out, but I am attached to the cobwebs and the tears.
Or, maybe they are attached to me...
I like this little poem very-very much!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Laz for your very generous comment. Much appreciated.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

I think what is being referred to here is the mind. Painful memories can live on in the recesses of consciousness for years. Sometimes current experiences can bring them to the surface. The tears may be trapped, but that doesn't mean they are dead.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John, yes it's a mind poem and how the dark and negative stuff can linger. Appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

We all have bad memories
Like flies trapped in spider webs
We walk through them unaware blind in the dark
Trapping us
Great poem

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Julie. How right you are, we all have dark corridors in our minds that we would rather not visit. Take care and keep safe.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

The tears of yesteryear, remembering all of them, trapped in cobwebs, probably in a dark cellar. A very clever poem here Chris. I like your choice of words to show us what was then, re-visited. I used to hate to go down to our cellar because my mother once shrieked when she found a snake! And I'm sure there were plenty of cobwebs, not sure if there were tears. A short, thoughtful piece.
Truly, B.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Betty. Your comments and reviews alwats appreciated. Take care my friend.

Chris

[Pete]

nice job chris. cleverly told. take caution in those corridors - especially if the floors were just waxed. i still need to try one of these ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Pete. I 'll remember those polished floors :) Appreciate you checking in.

Chris

[mattavelli]

Hello, Christine! :)
My first thought was that someone should get in there with a broom and get it cleaned up, but maybe they dont make those sort of brooms. Its an interesting read. Thanks for sharing.

[Chris Shaw]

Ha! I like your sense of humour mattavelli. If only - I reckon there could be quite a demand for such a specialised broom. Thanks for the chuckle.

Chris

[John Cardwell]

Nice one Chris! I like this a lot.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John. Have a great day and your visit welcome and appreciated.

Chris