Saltwater Taffy

The waxed paper wrappers

Saved our fingers from the

          Sticky candy.

And we unwrapped them

One

     by

          one

On our drive to the ocean.

I sat on the towel

While you performed tricks

With my orange and yellow kite,

Making it move in ways

I never knew possible,

     Reminiscent of the ways

          You made me move.

And in between

Amazing me

With your

     lightness

          and

               grace,

You’d do handstands in the sand

Just to make me laugh.

And then you sat next to me,

          The last time for many years,

And told me that we would only be

     an ocean

          apart.

I laughed then,

Not wanting to give in.

But I stuck that last taffy

          (it was purple, by the way)

in the pocket of my jacket.

And when I found it again,

After you’d been gone

          six months,

I put it on the shelf.

With it I put

     my desires

          my interests

               my hope

                    my heart.

And while you are there

Living life through empty letters

I am here

     realizing that you were only meant

          for a moment

               and not for forever.

And while you are there,

Living life to the fullest

I am here

     with all of me shelved

          sitting in a piece

               of purple taffy.

Reviews

[Janice Ann]

This was wonderfully written, I was right there with you. I could feel the tightness in my chest and know the lonely feeling...this was a wonderful write. I wish I could come up with a more effective word, but simply wonderful and real is all I can say!

Thanks for sharing...

[JenLyn]

Awesome write, I really loved the form this was my favorite part "And when I found it again,

After you’d been gone

six months,

I put it on the shelf.

With it I put

my desires

my interests

my hope

my heart.

And while you are there

Living life through empty letters

I am here

realizing that you were only meant

for a moment

and not for forever." it all flowed so nicely together and the imagery was amazing as well. Keep it up! :) 100/100

[Tate Morgan]

oh to be a child

[Silere]

Awesome poem.. so much emotions within your words.. I loved every line... especially the last six. Thanks goes out to Angel's Lady for requesting that I read this.. as it's written so well. I enjoyed this read so much! Thank you for sharing!

[MJ Durston]

Officially my new favourite poem, I'm not even going to attempt my normal "Something bad, Something good review", I just don't see anything bad, it's everything I look for in writing as a reader, there's flow, passion, emotion, description. It's as if I'm the one with the talent writing it. I especially love that you activated the poem by playing with the format, it just added to my enjoyment.

I'm glad Angel's Lady requested I read this one, it truly is a work of art.
II also enjoyed the metaphor of life as Taffy:

"Realizing that you were only meant
for a moment
and not forever"

I hope to see more like this!
Really, great job

Keep Writing,
Melissa

[Angel's Lady]

You utterly captivated me with this one....it's definitely going in my Favorites. How sensual and seductive you write. I applaud you.

[wizthom]

love the way u share laughter in the sun only to realize the moon took ur love away ,,u are a good writer of feelings that are dreams..peace wizthom

[Antonio Valentino]

It's too bad we can't wrap our own hearts in waxed paper
To keep them protected from the stickiness of life.
That piece of candy like countless others tucked away
Under layers of dust, or in forgotten pockets are sudden
Reminders of the sweeter memories we once held,
Now as fleeting as a dream.

The purple ones were always my favorite.

Loved This!
Antonio

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A lovely shaping which adds to the flow of a beautiful poetic expression of a short-lived past and a sad present.
"realizing that you were only meant

for a moment

and not for forever." was just wonderful. Thank you for sharing


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