Sorrow

My heart is a cavernous canyon

filling with tears

overflowing drop by drop

reminding me of the proverb

that little drops of water

make the mighty ocean.

Reviews

[Save the Trees, Save th..]

its short and too the point...love it

[sixXx]

i agree.. short and quite meaningful. an ocean indeed.

[Jenn]

Generally, I like the sentiment of the poem. The only critique I have to offer is "cavernous canyon." Normally, I'm all about alliteration, but there's something about this particular phrase which doesn't flow smoothly. For me, it just didn't seem to fit in with the rest of the poem, and I think by having that, you're sacrificing precision for word play.

[Mistral Bilgera]

wonderful! very short yet effective!
i don't know if i'm interpreting it right, but this is what i've extracted (positive, of course):

it's true that many tears from frustration and all the pain of a man
will soon build him to be a stronger individual

...well that's my interpretation. even if we don't have the same idea, the poem is still wonderful for me :)