when its not depression

ok so you think i'm crazy again
it just i don't know if i feel the pain
when you feel the pain its kind of strain
what can i do, it may all be in vain

i thought i was happier just then
trying to write by using the pen
could rid the stress by hiding in the den
everyone is thinking i'm crazy again

spent the weekend ranting and raving
which i have no memory of chanting
at this point am i worth saving
i could just stand and do all the flag waving

yea she's crazy, look at what she doing
now is stewing and brewing
now i'm pissed at what i'm viewing
you see no one is reviewing

now i'm being treated as a psychotic
when i wish i was being treated as erotic
i get the water treatment as aquatic
when i know i am such a neurotic

Reviews

[Lexi]

I really enjoyed the layout and rhyme scheme, also the word choice was very intresting. I liked it alot! The emotion conveyed through out the piece really got to me, I felt the loneliness and betrayal and rejection in the words. The only tip I have is to maybe work on fluency a little but besides that great! Well done doll, your perfect :) Head up :)

[Shadey Jadey]

This write is perfect

[STEVEN]

i spent the evening listening...you are such a wonderful person and writer...i love all that you do and say...you are a perfect person...dont ever think different...you are the best of the best...