why you so obsessed with me

she calls me her star
but she is the shine
that makes me twinkle

to tell her i miss her so much
be like missing air itself
things i cannot speak of

to miss her beautiful face
like the food to keep me going
keep me alive to worship her eyes

i know Mariah lost her mind
am not wasting my time
not delusional to be obsessed with you

to be sexing you is the farthest from my mind
may only desire is be next to you
i never want to be upseting you

may be losing my mind
i know i cannot impress you
i see wise in the eyes

Reviews

[Flo_writer]

"The Horizon" has the right idea here, you should elaborate this a little. I like it, but I could use a bit more. Um, what else? O, Oh yeah you have a grammar mistake where it say's "may only desire is be next to you." I think you meant to write "my." Nice read.

[Kevon]

wow, again, this feels like a casual write. Good Job.

[Just Charles]

Certainly an unconventional poem. Sounds like this was dredged from a song I heard recently. In any event, good song, but I'd elaborate a little more if I were you.