Hair

my imagination...

Breaking free of the skin,

tumbling against your shoulders like water against boulders,

twisting at innovative angles,

is your hair.

Dark and mysterious,

covered with chemicals,

but real in the softest way.

It's stuck in your head,

like the words you can't dare to speak,

like the thoughts you won't reveal,

like the feelings you desperately want to express.

It grows and grows,

but it grows no where.

Twirling around your lover's index,

twisting up his mind,

hypnotizing him,

you're blinding him with silence,

the most obscure sound he's never heard.

Your lips purse together,

your eyes glitter,

showing that you're thinking,

but in the sense you're speaking,

your hair is screaming,

reaching out for him,

begging him to stay,

while he untwists himself,

in silence,

in denial,

in depression,

you lay.

Reviews

[frnd]

wow. I never would have thought of personifying hair. It is very compelling and different.

[bey]

you said you couldnt write.

you gave me something to see with your words. very good.

[Bran the Broken]

very captivating, fresh imagery...amazing how you can go from simply, wistfully describing hair, to having it be the vehicle for such a powerful and deep emotional need(s)

[Flow~]

interesting perception on hair and its use to captivate men. Simple with a simplictic strong message, straight to the point with no chaser, I like it.

[Laura Ex]

i like how you incorporated a simple everyday thing (well for most people) into all different emotions. it's really creative to use it related to something someone wouldn't normally think of. almost.. metaphysical, if i can say that. good job. :]

[@zeewhykay]

I guess if you can't write, atleast you can feel :)

If I had found how to place favorites on this damned website, no doubt it would be in it.

You have a great ''feel'' for writing and I'm blown away by this original idea.

Incredible job ! Don't stop writing.

[Yosef]

visual and exiting. I have long hair & it does grow nowhere. haha.