Vices

A peek into my secrets...

Everyone has their vices

This that they can't let go of

Logic rarely will set us free

Instead we play to our own tune

Take me for instance

Sometimes my head is twisted

Sometimes I am up in the air

Sometimes I make a mess of things

It's something I don't grow out of

I am always wiping my slate clean

Erasing the past

So nobody knows the places I've been

The things I have seen and loved

And you are no different

Everyone has their vices

If you were perceptive, you know mine as well

Some say I'm a sinner for it

Some say I am normal

I simply say I am me

Reviews

[Karen666]

true we all have our vices. I have my own :) and I do like em lol. I love this poem

[Steven Cash]

Thanks a bunch

[Ees]

While it is quite true that everyone has their vices and they are things that they cannot let go of, I don't love the wording here: "This that they can't let go of"- the this that together is what bothers me.
Other than that the poem rolls on smoothly and truthfully.

[Steven Cash]

Gotcha

Thanks

[Sami Khalil]

Everyone has their vices
if you were perceptive.
Nice write.

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Baby Ricochet]

OOH I've got some vices

[Steven Cash]

We all do

[TheLastEclipse]

I was going to make a very long comment but all that I had to say was already said, so allow me to leave it at this. It was an exquisite poem with hard hitting points. Very real and not too cliche. I really enjoyed it! 100/100

[Steven Cash]

Thanks so much

[Allycat]

This is really relatable. Everyone has their vices. I really love how you ended this
"Everyone has their vices
If you were perceptive, you know mine as well
Some say I'm a sinner for it
Some say I am normal

I simply say I am me"
great work!

[Steven Cash]

Thanks Ally!

[CYNICALIS]

Most definitely something I can relate to. I think the part I liked the most was the line you said "It's something I don't grow out of", to me it seems most important. Because so often you see people that think certain parts of a person's personality is all because of age. When that's not always the case.
LOVED it. Great poem.

[Steven Cash]

Glad you like it.... but that's not what it meant

Great try tho :)

you have to look at the whole thing. It's code for what my vices are

[CYNICALIS]

Well poetry will always be perceived differently. What something might mean to one person it won't to another. That's why it's left open for interpretation. I was really saying that was how I perceived the line. But I'm sure what you use your symbolism for will be translated many different ways. But I will read again for the sake of my honest interest in learning about you as an author..

[Steven Cash]

thanks

and Do'nt be freaked out by what you find

[Steven Cash]

PM me, I do'nt want you to put it in the comment

[EileenMarie]

I like this....... I can relate.......... " some say I am a sinner for it" I have felt that wrath...

Great write!

[Steven Cash]

Thanks Ellen

[Amanda]

Nice job, i liked the six and eighth lines the best

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

not many get the symbolism and stuff

and hidden meanings

read moreThanks

not many get the symbolism and stuff

and hidden meanings

you do obviouslt

[Ahmad Cox]

Beautiful and powerful declaration of God and faith

[Steven Cash]

This is actually about Vices and addictions