Its here

 Leaving nothing behind i embrace you

I feel your coldness wrap around me

your comforting words call me closer

all fear is gone as i step into the abyss

your welcoming arms invite me in

holding me closer till i submit

I turn away from the world in which i exist

free from bonds and pain

i inch ever closer to you

sitting on the rocky edge i wait

overcoming my all consuming hate

I know you are there waiting for me

showing me which way to fall

you laugh as i let go

another victim claimed

 

Reviews

[Dara[DRAMATIC]]

The first thing to pop into my head when I read this? The phrase "greatest weakness". And that is just the thing a poem should do for the reader--give them a sense of the emotion the writer felt by bringing back a memory or common phrase/saying as it did for me. So you know what that means! Great writer in the room!! Haha. Honestly though, it's amazing to read. It conveys a strong sense of despair in its own way, something we can all relate to, which, by my standards, makes it a highly publishable piece. Great job!

[Charles D. Moorer]

Depressing. The greatest weakness is despair. You have managed to capture one poor soul who has given in and given up. And you have managed to do so rether nicely. Good job.