why did you go

 Numb, i stood there in shock,

my knees trembled and i couldn't breathe

i knew you would be gone soon

but it didn't ease the pain

I loved you more than anything

and love you still i do

everyday i pray for you

and wish it wasn't  true

but daddy i know you're gone now

and i hope you are ok

i know that again ill be with you

maybe one day soon

 

 

Reviews

[..R.I.P..]

This is so raw and beautiful. I'm sorry that your dad died, and I know how it feels to lose someone close. It must have been hard for you to write this. It's beautiful, and I loved it.

[Fidheallir]

It feels very stream-of-thought and emotional. The uneven meter adds to the feeling of confusion. The one recommendation I'd make is to check for capitalization issues.

[~angelalala~]

this is very heartbreakingly sad but a good write. draws out emotions many of us can relate to. i'm sure most have lost someone they care about very deeply. it's always hard to see them go, even though we all know, death is inevitable for us all. a good write.

[tomboy]

I enjoyed it immensely. Please continue writing.

[Fran Marie]

It's so sad when you lose a love one~ and this piece was deeply expressed
and well written~Fran Marie