I couldn't resist some free verse! I was inspired by some poetry I'd read so attempted a bit of abstract stuff. I would like some feedback of what you thought of this write!
Also many thanks to OT who gave me some help with this one!
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Hey Chels(ea):
This is my first time reading on of your poems. So far, I am greatly impressed. For someone of your age, you are amazingly talented. I am guessing that your best subject is English?! I know mine is. But one thing that I found was that I spent too much time working on my stories, and I got way behind in my other subjects.
As of your poem, excellent. I love the way you compared the inside view and the outside view of a wind storm. I know that in a storm, it always feels good to be inside. Your sentence structure was excellent and so was your description. Most people have a hard time with description, but girl, you have it nailed! Thanks for sharing it with us!
Nice work! I love your writing style. Its so creative to describe the outside then the inside. Really creative. I wish I could write a free verse poem like this. Nice one.
I love your images, Chels.. my two favorites: "chattering teeth, eat the warmth off candles" and "wind roars in rebels b***h slapping water"
Your words speak volumes in such short lines and you capture "Windy Night" perfectly.
My only constructive criticism would be a more powerful ending instead of "foolish, humans"... the ending just leaves me a little flat, but that could just be me.