Trapped in the Dark

Depressing poem.

Trapped in the Dark

Bags filled with weight; fastened to me

My feet stumbling under the weight

My body a protesting piece of jelly

Hopeless attempts trampled on by others

Unable to sustain my last bit of strength,

I trip; sailing down to the ground

Hitting it hard; tie dying the sidewalk with blood

I fall into a mysterious land

Greeted oh with such friendliness……

Hands close around my throat,

Throwing me into a panicked desperation

Wanting to leave this place

My hands reach around in the dark; only gripping air

My eyes adjusted to the dark only seek barren lands

My feet glued to the ground, unable to move forward

My body not cooperating; a demonic being of it’s own

Nothing. Nobody. I’m alone

Hell

Author's Note

Sorry for the dark poem :/
Please review,

Reviews

[HopelesslyDevoted]

no don't apologize, i actually love the way that you write dark poetry! this is genius! my favorite line of this poem had to be
"tie dying the sidewalk with blood"
you tooks something that is usually thought of something good and turned into something that just brings absolute horror to the reader.
nice work!!

[Tony]

Nightmarish and paralyzing write!-- the feelings of helplessness you create are chilling!

[hannajade]

ohhh, very nice. dark, but, its good that you can write on diffferent subjects so well:)

[Goodbye]

Wow - one of your best yet. Very gripping, but still keeping a poetic tone and keeping it raw.

Excellent!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Once again, awesome!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This was very dark indeed. I like the way it's narrated. Great job~

[Kate Hunter]

very well written.

[*skittlez*]

if this was a palace i kinda would love to see it this is also a very good poem

[Jonathan De Elvira]

It is dark but still nice,
hurm..kinda brought back some memories though, still trying to heal myself right now...I think many people can be relate with this one...wish you luck mate, hold on...

[tynamite]

If this was a place, I would love to see it. This poem is so dark it's untrue.

[deeps]

I like the emotion you brought forth with this write.