Witness

Witness

A Poem by Damian Alan Gray
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for the Fly Who Knew All contest at the Working Writers group

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If I was a fly on a wall
the things I would know,
the things I would tell,
and oh!
 
the things I would show.
 
If I was a fly on the wall
all your life would be mine,
all observed and viewed,
and oh!
 
all within my eye shine.
 
If I was a fly on the wall
what ill wonders to see?
your loathing and deceit,
and oh!
 
your hate and treachery.
 
If I was a fly on the wall …
and oh!
 
Worry not, my dear, for the fly has a thousand eyes.

© 2008 Damian Alan Gray


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I'm so glad you aren't the fly on my wall. :) This is light while still holding a serious tone of voice, for a fly...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Really Great Job Seems I have some stiff Competition on this one! great Write!

~Frances~

Posted 12 Years Ago


i have become quite paranoid...cheers

Posted 12 Years Ago


lol it reminds me of the cramps song human fly

Posted 12 Years Ago


it would've been interesting to be a fly on the wall of that hotel room the governor of new york spent four hours in last month, that's for sure.

i think everybody wishes they could have the power to see and hear all. but that'd be very dangerous...so let's all thank the man upstairs (gus, the guy who owns the apartment building i live in) it's not possible.

Posted 12 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked the repetition of "If i was fly on the wall...." it was really creative. We all wish that we could be a fly on the wall

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is awesome! its so true, ive always dreamt about walls with eyes, and this has the same idea, except with a fly. i dig it. it would be cooler to be able to fly anyway. haha great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like this. I like the format. Thanks for sharing.

Elise

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like this....the format allows it to take on a lyrical quality....it just rolls right off the tongue.

I adore the false reassurance in the last line: "Worry not, my dear, for the fly has a thousand eyes."

Brilliance.



Posted 12 Years Ago



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