modest

Tread easy

Little feet

Little paces

Make life sweet

 

Take another

Have a seat

Break my heart

Broken mistreat

 

Haze and bone

Blood on the street

Light conversation

              Head first concrete

Reviews

[George David Hope]

Really enjoyed this.....don't know if you meant this but it reminds me of some ones life story...Tiny paces when they were a child.....Have a seat break my heart broken mistreat...meeting his girlfriends parents, break my heart broken mistreat.....he's unfaithful....Light conversation..voices he hears on his death bed and head first concrete is his tomb stone......maybe I'm reading it in too much depth but I really liked it.

[light and ashes]

Well, that escalated quickly! lol
really nice write
I really enjoyed it.

[Amanda Trerotola]

The ending stuck with me as it caught me by surprise.

[FaeryQueen]

hmmm... im not broad on imagery here, but i can sense kids are involved, why kids? idk, great write friend

[AKhaus]

the cadence and word choice are in perfect symmetry