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A funny poem

Gray was the day you slipped away

Out of my grasp, you left my path

 

The hours gained power

As they’ve passed on the clock tower

 

Years have come and gone

Life has moved on

 

Sun has warmed my frozen heart

Prepared me for a new start

 

For you, my vengeance has turned to dust

Along with my lust

 

Time has ran its course

Thank God for divorce

Reviews

[The Perfectionist]

Cute ending, decent premise, good word choice. Horrible, horrible rhythm. Two lines that are supposed to rhyme (especially in couplets) should be the same length, and twice you come closer to double than equal. Breaks the flow and distracts from the rest of the poem. Clean that up.

[Poetic Beauty]

The last line says it all sweety. Great write and the emotions are clear.

[?]

hahaha, That is some wonderful humor.
Loved the wording and rhyming.
Flow was great.

[KAREN]

Bravo! Hahaha! Love the humor!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Loving this! I've missed your writing! Excellent

[Michael Davis]

A very interesting perspective regarding divorce and I'm certain any future prospects will love this poem. Good luck on the dating scene.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem was sad enough before the loss of will to feel anything hit.
Broken hearted...I was left.

[sarah]

Glad you are ready for a new start we time heals all wounds great write!

[M.Babu]

I especially enjoyed this line...

"Gray was the day you slipped away
Out of my grasp, you left my path"

The flow was remarkable in it.

Otherwise the piece was (due to lack of any other word)...i'd say REAL...the last line really went through me as you took me on the rollercoaster of a tale here...And nice ending really put a smile on my face:) Didn't expect it

Nicely done!

~M.Babu~

[A Risen Heroine.]

Nice xD
I liked the flow!
Well done :D

~A Fallen Heroine~

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

LMAO... I say AMEN for the big D... that was so funny and smooth flowing. Gave me a chuckle