unbearable pain

Wish I could scream out loud and deep,
As I silently turn to weep and sleep..
This pain is something that is tearing me apart,
Stop me from breaking,or stab me hard..
My heart is drooping,something is going deep and down,
This is making me empty and torn..
Wish I could embrace death and sleep peacefully for once and for all...
Life has made me cry enough,
I can't think of standing up again if this is the way I fall.

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

review:
it's hard being healed from poor heartaches esp. when one's excruciatingly eroded by the tuft of unidentified love. a very deceptive-yet-depressed poetry you've come to lick down in such heartfelt words. purely captivating, & intrinsically cummed (bled out) stuff. almost had my whole attention.

rating: 100/100
ps. rhythmic flow's also very eye-catching, accordingly. great job here!
(90% - for thoughts
5% - for rhythm
5% - for being juxtaposed throu' recalled memories.)