Flesh Eater

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Flesh Eater

'There is a suspicious thing going around the town. People call it a flesh eater and whatever the creature is, it goes around at night on the roads, and finds a human to eat and rip their flesh. There have been a number of dead bodies ripped of flesh on roads and so please, DO stay at home at night.' said the lady on the news.

Lily looked outside the window. It was very dark outside. Rain was crying its way to the ground. Thunder crackled and made thundering sounds that scared everyone in the house. The clouds were so big and 3D looking that they seemed to be crouching down.

'Mum, do you think the flesh eater is searching in our neighborhood?' Lily asked.

'Why would the flesh eater come on OUR road? There are millions of other roads! And don't you think about those negative stuff. We won't be going outside at night anyways.' said Lily's sister, Sarah, who was 13 years old.

Sarah face was powdered with make-up and she wore bright lipstick. Lily thought it looked disgraceful on her.

Sarah and Lily went upstairs.

'So, let's play a truth and dare game.' Lily said.

'Ok then.' said Sarah.

Lily was the one who had to do the dare.

'Your dare is....' said Sarah. 'go outside with an umbrella and walk on the road.'

'But it's raining outside!' said Lily. 'And the flesh eater might be there!'

'What did I tell you? There are millions of other roads!' said Sarah.

Lily gulped and imagined the flesh eater ripping and eating skin.

She shivered.

'Is the heating even on?' said Lily.

Lily fiddled with her silky brown hair.

'But...' said Lily. '...Do you even want me to be eaten?'

'I trust on geographical facts. I mean, seriously, there are millions of other roads that the "flesh eater" could go on.' said Sarah. 'If you do it, I will...am...give you my jar of sweets.'

'Well, I guess you're right, Sarah.' Lily said.

Lily went downstairs and got her umbrella. She quietly walked out of the house, only Sarah knew that Lily was out of the house.

'That Lily, such a scare-dy cat she is.' said Sarah.

Lily was walking on the damp road. Puddles were everywhere filled with dirt and germs.

Lily looked around, everyone was inside their house. The road was quiet, just the rain crashing into the ground.

Lily gulped.

Lily walked forward into the dark. She couldn't see anything in the dark at the far end.

But this was extremely scary, but Lily didn't dare look back.

'Will I be eaten or not?' Lily thought.

It smelt of rotten raisins.

Then, something extremely horrifying happened.

The umbrella was so pushed down by Lily that she couldn't now see what was ahead of her.

She put her umbrella back to place and when she looked ahead, she saw an ugly creature.

It had 2 arms and 2 legs. It had a face of a monstrous beast. He had an axe in his hairy hands. His nails were long, they had to be about the size of one ruler. He was hairy all over but his ugly, ghostly, looks made Lily scream!

'Ahhhh!!!!!' shouted Lily.

Panic raced Lily and terror seized her tight.

The creature opened his mouth and opened and closed is fists.

Lily quickly turned around and raced up! Lily's breath got tired easily, number one, because she was panicking, number two, she was running extremely fast. She ran in front of her door and knocked on it. She turned around and saw the creature standing there with his lanky legs and his face tilted to an angle at about 45 degrees to the left.

Lily knocked on it quiet a lot. The creature made a bubbling deep noise and slowly walked towards Lily. His steps were big but heavy.

Lily caught her breath. Her mind was going all dizzy.

She tried to focus her eyes but they too, got dizzy

The door opened and her mum saw her.

'Lily?' said her Mum, confused.

Lily's eyes were half closed.

'Monster...close door...now...' said Lily running out of breath.

Lily's mum closed the door and then she heard someone banging on the door, but she didn't dare open it.

Lily was put on the sofa by her mum.

After ten seconds, Lily's eyes opened.

'What happened? What did you see? Flesh eater? And why did you go outside?' asked mum.

But Lily was too tired to talk.

Then Lily heard the door banging.

'Mum, don't open the door.' said Lily. 'The..the flesh eater.'

Sarah ran downstairs.

'Wa..what?' said Sarah.

'I saw the flesh eater and ran away, and I guess that's the thing outside.' said Lily. 'But I think flesh eater are strong enough to break into doors.'

'Oh no.' said Sarah.

Thomas, Lily's baby brother started crying. Lily gave Thomas the dummy and finally he remained quiet.

'What should we do?' said Lily's dad.

'Hide in the store and lock ourselves inside.' said Sarah. 'That's the only choice.'

Mum, Dad, Lily, and Sarah ran to the store (inside the house) with Thomas in Lily's arms, and locked themselves with the keys.

Then the banging on the door got louder. And the house door broke open.

'Mum, what are we going to do?' asked Lily, whispering.

'I hope Thomas doesn't start to cry or-' mum stopped at the end.

They could hear footsteps of the flesh eater in the house.

'I think we can get out from this store to outside. There are no more than one flesh eaters anyway.' whispered dad.

'But how will we get out of a brick built store?' whispered mum.

'Well, for emergencies, I built this place not out of bricks, but material that looks EXACTLY like bricks. But they're soft, easy to break.' whispered dad.

Dad started breaking the wall quietly.

Dad had made a small hole in the wall, and he was making it even bigger, faster than what Lily had expected.

But the noise of the wall breaking (it was not loud enough for the flesh eater to hear), made Thomas scared. And Thomas unfortunately started to cry.

Lily panicked and put the dummy back into his mouth and then gave him a smooth stroke on the back.

Thomas stopped crying.

But the flesh eater had heard enough to see where the crying was coming from.

He babbled in his superstitious language and walked nearer, and nearer, to the store.

He growled menacingly and got his vast, sharp nails which were all dirty ready for the big meal.

He walked faster and his steps grew heavier.

He bashed the store-door open.

He growled loudly.

'Ghaaa!!!' growled the flesh eater.

He saw that there was no one in the store and that there was a big hole in the wall big enough to fit a person through.

But this flesh eater understood that the family went out using this hole in the wall. The flesh eater growled once again and ran out of the house via the hole in the wall in the store.

The family were at the busy street waiting for the bus.

'What if the flesh eater finds out where we are?' asked Lily.

'Don't know.' said Sarah.

The bus arrive and the family rushed into it.

'Where shall I take you?' said the bus driver.

Mum was in panic, 'Just go anywhere, but quick, far away from the place! GO!'

The bus driver drove to random roads.

On the way, they saw the flesh eater at the end of the road. Lots more people saw him but were afraid to even stand three roads away from him.

'But...I really have a feeling that the flesh eater will find us.' said Mum.

'There's a whole world out there. This flesh eater doesn't have to be the only one. There might be others, more dangerous, much more big and -' but dad was stopped by Sarah.

'Dad! Mum! I you guys are going to be negative, who's going to support their children? Be positive.' said Lily.

Sarah was looking at herself in the mini mirror she had in he pocket, she was sorting out her make-up, the foundation she powdered on her skin.

'Sarah, seriously? We're in trouble and you're here sorting out your stupid make-up? Get a load of it! Get fed of it! Let go of it!' said Lily getting seriously angry.

Would the flesh eater catch up? Would he eat them? Would he follow them? What will happen next?

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Your story is definitely interesting but the writing makes it tough to follow and read which takes away from your content. There are many grammatical errors, and there are quite a few spots where the correct word is missing. For example "Lily knocked on it quiet a lot " instead of "quite a lot". If you take some time to focus on the language used you will have an easier time sharing your creative side with us! Do keep up the good work! I invite you to read a chapter from my book Tegra 7, perhaps you can provide me with some creative insight! Maybe even a horror twist on my story. Thanks!