V.A.Beach

Beautiful white sand,

The sun cresting the ocean,

Casting it’s warm yellowy

Glow over the pale sands

beneath my bare feet.

 

The salty air fills my nostrils

And the gentle breeze blows my hair.

Soft beneath my feet,

An alien feeling,

Unlike that of home.

 

The cool and gentle waves

Hesitantly lap at my ankles,

Yanking a sudden shrill shriek

From my salty-air filled lungs.

 

The light slowly shining over the sands,

No one on the beach to be found.

With the beach to myself,

I sit and watch,

The most magical moment of my life.

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

oh, it's PRETTY!! the images you filter out here are wonderful and you do a great job of using every sense you can to make this seem almost alive. vibrant. bubbling with liquid electricity. to make this even better don't be afraid to add or rearrange words to ease flow. also, if you'd stay away from cliches like "the most magical moment of my life" poems gain cool points xD cliches are usually only poetic if they're used ironically or satirically.

[Writer *78*]

Like the imagery that you use within your writing makes it pop out more and catch the reader.

-Writer *78*

[Tony]

Just in case you didn't know, this is the place where you will find BJ from now on.
Very Colorful poem.
One can tell you love the place....

[Thomas Sawyer]

'Casting its warm yellowy glow' that should be on a single line. A nice poem though

[Sam]

Such a pretty poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very beautiful poem. I'm a great fan of the sea also. My best days were watching the waves and drinking wine with good friends. Very good description of of Virginia beach. A excellent poem.
Coyote