summer rain

i still remember
the hot summer's day
under the oak tree
where you used to lay

i still remember the smell of your hair
of sunflower yellow,
a quick, teasing
dare.

i still remember the note that you left,
that you were leaving and
there grew something new
a split in reality, between me and you

i still remember the look in your eyes
the utter pain and
the look of hurt surprise
when i looked straight into your eyes

and as i think,
of these memories of you,
i just relive it all over again
and the summer begins to rain.

Reviews

[Undying Glory]

man this was absolutely sweet work, nice one. think you've really outdone yourself with this one.
"i still remember the look in your eyes
the utter pain and
the look of hurt surprise
when i looked straight into your eyes

and as i think,
of these memories of you,
i just relive it all over again
and the summer begins to rain."
epic words man!

[razormuse]

I think the pain & sadness, betrayal all lend themselves to a very somber write. I enjoyed it though.

[Ruth]

Beautiful!!!
The rain infused here with the memories is quite something!
Always a beautiful detail to have rain in an emotional poem, wonderful!
xx

[jazmin]

very detailed. i loved it!:)