tell me

Tell me that lie
The one we all know

Tell me that lie
Say you won't go

Tell me that lie
The one that I hate

Tell me that lie
One day too late

Tell me that lie
Until you can't breathe

Tell me that lie
You make my heart seethe

Tell me that lie
Until I disappear

Tell me that lie
When I'm no longer here

Reviews

[Lizzie Mitchell]

I like this. It seems to have an underlying theme of death. I'm not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's the feel I got from it. Will this lie be worth it when it's too late to take it back?

[creativequill]

exactly what i was going for, thank you

[Chris]

The repetition held meaning... the content was thought-full.

[creativequill]

thank you for the review, always appreciated

[Chris]

more of a comment actually...

[creativequill]

yes, it was, the word review was stuck because thats what it says when i click the notification...still appreciated though

[Chris]

you're welcome... a thought though - So many repeats - might you be better served by combining some thoughts and letting the fewer repeatscarry more of an impact?