If Love Fails

When a heart is afflicted by the seeds of love,
It spreads the disease to vein and bone;
But when love fails and sadness breaks,
The heart must shoulder it all alone.

 

If love be squeezed out from my last fibre,
I'll hope with every atom of my soul
That though my heart be torn to pieces,
I might someday be able to make it whole.

 

Though my heart may ache and my bones may break,
Though my eyes may cry and my tears run dry,
I won't give up; I won't back down;
I'll never give up before one more try.

Reviews

[zero binty]

Reading this piece at this point in my life comes very ironic. I am suffering through what you have so eloquently put into words. Whereas I am not yet to the hopeful phase, reading through your experience and positive spin slightly lessens the pain. For that, I thank you.

[Priya]

I'm so glad I could make someone feel even a little bit better with my words :)

[Archia]

This was a great poem of hope instead of giving up. I like how you make it seem like such a horrible situation but then come out with a positive message at the end. Oh also, I loved "The heart must shoulder it all alone." that line; I liked it's meaning.

[Alexandria Reece]

A very well-executed rhyme scheme and a heart-moving topic that you truly put to justice with your words, excellence.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This is absoutely beautiful and true :)
Great job!

[Crazy Cat Man]

if love fails we move on until someone loves us the same in return :D great piece

[MOON]

Great imagery and flow and if love fails , I will give it one more try.

[Coyote Poetry]

Love is best and worst days of life.
"I won't give up; I won't back down;
I'll never give up before one more try."
I agree with the above statement. Best to had loved and lost. Then to have sat and watched. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Leigh]

Its better to have loved and lost..but even better to try and love again is making the point to me that life itself is more important than love alone. I like the way you have transposed the hearts spiritual role back to the physical and looking at love in terms of mechanics.

[>-Eros->]

Very motivating write; to consider all that can go wrong and then to accept never giving up, takes a heart of gold... that kind might melt but never breaks. Nice bit of wisdom here. Thanks.

[reflectingus]

I love that little imagery you have here, the first line reminds me slightly of a flower, and then also, the way you compare 'love' with 'disease', that expresses that animosity we feel, after a bad heartbreak. I really like the rhyme scheme, the poem flows very easily, and very enjoyable to read. The truths you have spoken about love is very expressive, and it is the truth, indeed, that when love fails, we have to shoulder that pain alone, and try to arise from the ashes and recover for another go. Perfectly expressed, beautifully written, excellent job.

[SilentNiaAngel]

great work- i njoy readin dis