Discovery

One day
I decided to run away.
I swam across the river,
went in to the plains,
on to the plateau
and atop the mountains;
the highland of cloud fountains!

I stopped to see
as to how far had I run,
and was astonished
to find myself there
from where I had begun!

The entity was still accompanying me;
Black, opaque, shadowy.....

Why,
It was the "I", I say,
from which I had made
a futile attempt
to run away.

Such instances reiterate.
They seem to have become my fate.
And even as I resist,
there seems to be none a getaway
from where the "I"
would make an exit.

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Is he running from his shadow? I really like this idea if that's right. Even if it's not, well, hey, everyone interprets things differently, right? Either way, I liked this! "Cloud fountain" was one of my favorite parts. It invoked this image of the mountains giving birth to clouds as if they were a fountain, which I'm sure is what you were going for.

Very good write! I quite enjoyed it.

This is so amazing, loved reading this. May have to again, Awesome!

[Alexus Shanae]

this was so cool:)
Its like a really mature reminiscent of dr. suess, me like.