All Because of you

All Because of you

A Poem by SamBug

It's hard to think of trust

because I let you in before

...and sat there...

   ...broken

      ...torn apart

all because of you.

 

It's hard to think of friendship

because I know what is coming

...I sit here...

   ...breaking

      ...tearing apart

all because of you.

 

It's hard to think of love

because my heart will twist

...I will sit there...

   ...and break

      ...and tear apart

all because of you.

© 2010 SamBug


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This is a sad poem, but is nice to read. I have been there, done that, and still am going through it. I haven't talked to the person that has hurt me. I have not said a single word to him. I can't have another friend like that again. I hate when people act like he does. I have friends that I truly care about and I will try not to make any new ones. This also reminded me of the poem I wrote, but mine is a little different. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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I like the structure as well and the pattern you can trace within each stanza demonstrating the lines of broken trust. Wonderful job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the structure of the poem. It's like it keeps coming and I like the message that was portrayed in the poem. Great job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Trust, given so freely and yet at times regretted! Excellent portrayl of that love!
xx

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice

Posted 14 Years Ago


If trust, friendship and love are part of a whole (are they?), these brief stanzas say the same thing (of course, that might be what you're after in this poem). The format works the ellipses inserted after certain indentations. Keep the poems coming.

Posted 14 Years Ago


such a sad piece when you lose the trust, you lose the love. When you lose the love your lose the friendship. I like this and the way you formatted the piece.

Posted 14 Years Ago


you can sense the weight of emotion. great poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the emotions repeated in this it shows that the conflict your having is getting stronger. I feel like I have read this poem before but I am not sure maybe another poem that was alike this might have got me confused. I like the way you use the three dots in the lines repeated. It makes a steady flow and it makes it more easier to read in your head

Posted 14 Years Ago


It's somewhat basic, not that that is a bad thing. The message is clear but in my opinion a bit to simply put. I think this is good and quite true but I think it's a bit too simple though I still rather enjoyed it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Trust is something that takes time to build but can be torn apart in a single moment... I like this... the wording is simple and direct but powerful in emotional release.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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