Sinking Falling

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Into an bottomless pit.

No one to catch me.

No one to save me.

No one to help me.

No one to care.

 

Nobody.

 

 

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Into a living nightmare

Reviews

[Matt DeFranco]

This is quite creative, I like it!

[Sami Khalil]

The form and wording are great . They give us that sinking feeling...Bravo

[Wolfwind]

Hmmm... I think the falling words creates an interesting effect. For as I read this, I'm reminded that words that we speak are our words, we own them in a sense. Thus if a word we craft takes a shape, that shape has a meaning.... Yet, perhaps there's another way to see that shap. While indeed, people fall all the time into these bothersome nightmares. Maybe it's possible to simply look up and see that words that had led them down and climbe them back up like ladders or stairs? For they are our words are they not?

So overall, me the eternal optimist shall say to the soul of the poem, "Here's some coffee! Wake up!" =)

Technically, the piece has it's own unique flavor of style and layout. It certainly brings across its meaning well. So in that sense, it's done it's job.

Aaron - Wolfwind